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#1 User is offline   Vampyre 

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Posted 11 July 2010 - 09:07 PM

You are like
a jock strap
that has been
through the wash
too many times.

#2 User is offline   Bernard Alain 

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Posted 11 July 2010 - 11:12 PM

like pointless reincarnations eh ... I like this, you could get more mileage out of this by dropping 'You are', still, a good read

#3 User is offline   SkaaDee 

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Posted 12 July 2010 - 01:44 PM

that's better than one that has never visited rinse and spin.
a far cry.
If it's round it's a burger,
square it's a fish.

#4 User is offline   SkaaDee 

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Posted 12 July 2010 - 01:45 PM

I think you could remove "You are" .
If it's round it's a burger,
square it's a fish.

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